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your eyes give you away

he proffered his hand
and you took it
       willingly
closing my eyes
       freezing my emotions
       once again
repeat the past

and looking up into your face
       you could not meet my eyes
as fingers danced beneath the table

an empty laugh
a barren smile
       did you think you would fool anyone?
the world already knows
offering excuses for your actions
       apologies for your mistakes
but you are living for the moment
and visionless you continue on
       without me
       within me
the thorn that buries itself in my heart

he offered his arm
and you took it
       readily
shutting my eyes
       to bitter unshed tears
       once again
and we repeat the past







june 16, 2002
8:02 pm
:iconspunj13:
here's one of the promised poems as per inspiration of last weekend *sigh*... as these poems unravel themselves maybe you'll see what happened

//spunj13
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:iconguidinglight:
Excellent poem, i do not need to state the obvious ..lol
Ur work is brilliant.
The amount of comments is overwhelming! Nice one!
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:iconyour-noose:
~your-noose Dec 22, 2002   Photographer
So great, yet so sad. Such a description of my life at the moment. Thank you.
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:iconlorelaiv:
Oh my...painfully familiar emotions...
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:iconhedda:
I can guess what is going on....
:( (Sad)

great poem though....you paint a picture of a truly selfish person... ((sigh))
the repeated reference to your eyes is very powerful...

Love
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:iconmilath:
like the symmetry of this one.. really helps mark the emotion. i get the feeling of someone listening to a favorite song over and over until they're sick of it. if that makes any sense at all.. :O (Eek)

'fingers danced beneath the table' god, what a great phrase!

excellent work as usual from you.

milath
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:iconanemovatis:
~anemovatis Jun 20, 2002  Professional Interface Designer
After reading this only one word escaped my mouth +fav :) (Smile)
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:iconmasterfire:
when i read this i got the weirdest feeling...

o yea, beautiful writting..
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:iconcouchfry:
man you slay me with every piece of yours i read :( (Sad) ......great piece, love the emotions that you evoke with piece. nice and i understand all the more what you're going through ........:( (Sad)
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:iconjesusbite:
Wow. Just... wow. dumbstruck. Sadness. wow. I want to w00t, but it wouldnt be appropriate, would it?
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:iconepitomei:
oh my. i am so far from being good with words in response to words, but this is so entirely wonderful. beautiful crafting/weaving*
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