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the sound of footsteps

i have memorized the sound
       clipclip
       tap-tip
       clopbang
of my step upon the stair

and it sounds nothing like yours

the graceful
       tap-tap
ping of heels
hidden beneath earth flowing dress
which betrays your figure (so well)
       and causes my step to stutter

the light and ghostly
       brush-swish
ing of bare feet
       as your cross the floor to meet me
each step
       closer
each moment deeper

__

your sandals make a
       step-slap
ping sound as you pack your bags
your suitcases of sighs
       and boxes of memories
leaving me
       with only echose
and the sound of my footsteps
       meeting yours
             upon the stair




august 12, 2002
4:22 pm
:iconspunj13:
this was inspired by the sound of me running up and down the steps of my home library (i mean..in my home town) as i searched for good poetry books (go figure...they're hard to find sometimes)... anyways...i got this sort of story in my head (not unlike dashboard's screaming infidelities) and wrote this down... hope that it comes across right...

//spunj13

p.s. it's fiction... for anybody who was wondering...
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Given 2002-08-14
We grow too used to thinking of the world as a collection of sights; sometimes our other senses paint things more keenly. the sound of footsteps by spunj13 is a perfect example of how sound, in this case, can be just as powerful as any image could be. [sent by deejbard ] (Selected by +skyorange) ( Featured by `skyOrange )
:iconafraidoffear:
awesome poem dude i have to fav this
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:iconcooper:
congrats on the DD, well deserved, a beautiful piece... :O (Eek)
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:iconattitude2k:
~attitude2k Sep 6, 2002   Photographer
juss re-read this poem, I commented and added to favs when u got the dp (which was well deserved), I was just r-reading it now.
the uniqueness got me at first but then I got the sound of your words and it made ti that much more special.
once again I commemorate you on one of the best poems here on da!
congrats!
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:icontobie:
~tobie Aug 23, 2002  Hobbyist General Artist
i
am
stunned
amazed

and merely
at awe



write more
please?
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:iconselene:
awesome piece...i am all about the visual effect of this one
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:iconjsenn:
Absolutely lovely and gently seductive, I like the whole scene you painted with your words and the mood is wonderful.
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:iconbreid:
~breid Aug 15, 2002  Professional Artist
Heh heh. Spunj rocks the DP.
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:iconbrooke:
the poem is really good, but you know that. i really like the picture. its something different. amazing work!
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:icontmpst24myst:
`tmpst24myst Aug 15, 2002  Student Writer
i don't even know what to say here. you will have to excuse me while i pick my jaw up and jump start my heart..

there are so many things i could point out that are laughing at perfection while it tries to compete with this. the style and form are that of powerful definition to the emotions and meaning and the feeling you left me with at the end...i felt there should have been more, only out of my own greed to have reached the ending of a magnificant trip.. but maybe i feel as he did, he wanted more, he didn't want it to just stop....
......frustrating isn't it?

i could go on for ever raving how good this really is but as it is, i am rambling.

Heart
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:iconpwca:
BraV
O!!

it's true, you forget what your so used to hearing...
I'm glad you got the idea dahling!! You portrayed it well!!!
Beautiful!!
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