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this reminds me of novels i used to read as a child. i love the story in this one because its at teh perfect length, i love the format as always because your format always seems like a staircase and stepping stones in itsself. love is bitter but so beautiful in words.
As i was reading this piece, i pictured a woman smiling cynically as she (pretended) to offer her hand with promises of warmth, hope and love...promises that she never intended to keep...she only seeks gain from it all but give nothing in return...
And at the end of the last stanza...i had one line repeating in my head (i don't know where it came from but it kept ringing very clearly in my head)
'Don't cry...tears are for those that matter.'
I think this is very well written. I agree that it's blunt, but it just works that way. Imagine it being more descriptive but written basically the same way...something I certainly would have to drudge through unwillingly. There's a lot of feeling in this also, which would've died quickly if it were written with more detail I think.
Great work!