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memories (i never had)

i can feel the taste of tears
rising in my throat
      swallow
keep it down
we don't want to wake the neighbors
with our sympathies
      our word addictions
for the faceless names
that have snuck from between the dusty pages
grabbed our hands
      and led us on a merry dance
through the dark apple tree forests
shadows in the moonlight
      no reflections in their empty eyes

i reach out my hand
grasping for yours in the dark
the figure in the chair by the pool
      looking out over the sea
not touching
not speaking
      but it is only fiction
that holds us apart
      and your face is just a suggestion
over the sound of crashing waves
close my eyes
      and smell the salt
feel the whisper of your skin
as you pass by
      into the settling night







march 2, 2004
1:18 am
:iconspunj13:
having just read (a few weeks ago) the book Cider House Rules... (it's crap don't bother... ) i was slightly inspired to write for the first time in.. well.. months really... i'm trying to get back into it... so you'll have to forgive the crappiness of this one...

[spunj13]
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memories - i never had by `spunj13 is about the title, in italics, and feeling "the taste of tears rising in my throat", "a merry dance through dark apple tree forests". It is fantasy which sweeps you into the dream, the whispers, the smell, the shadow of you passing by. ( Featured by °jsenn )
:iconmairethestrange:
This to me was a really well laid out and interesting poem and for someone who hasn't written in months it's a really excellent effort. Keep it up! :juggle:
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~LOSTACIDjoKer Oct 1, 2004  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this, very powerful, and emotional, yet still clean and crisp, great work, very awe inspiring!!
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:iconsanlou018:
I like the way you describe the ocean! It's very cool. You should keep writing, you're very good at it!
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:iconpaladin2001:
Well, I agree with most of the other commentators here that this is a wonderfully written, gripping piece of poetic imagery, rather than crap.
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~megani Apr 6, 2004  Student Digital Artist
OMYGOSH! wow! this is..wow..words cannot express how much i truly love this poem....wow! just WOW!:D!! this is really really good..so deep..I feel every word..affecting me in some weird way..I don't know why, but I can really relate to this...I lived on an apple orchard for the first eight years of my life..I really really like this!!:hug: keep up this great work!
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:iconkarmaghost:
Considering that you hvaen't written in months, this is quite an amazing product. I especially like how the second stanza is held over an ocean. Saltwater...oh what a great reflection (is this a planned allusion) to the tears of the first stanza. "No reflection shown in their eyes" is also a great way to repeat that they are memories you never had. You can't remember what is not happening--and when there's no reflection, it's not really there a la Dracula. Kudos, kudos, kudos.

Bury my head for the same, you pick me up, you say I lok like you / Though it makes no sense to me, you make me believe that I could trust someone / I could ever trust someone... <<This is actually an excerpt from a Jars of Clay song ("Sing" from their album Who We Are Instead) that carries a weight behind it and I'm not sure why your poem conjured it into my mind. You never had the memories; you can't trust the people you share them with when you cannot see the reflection in their eyes...~sighs~ I know I'm rambling, but just know that this is a great poem.
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:iconbinhulrik:
just to jump on the bandwagon, i'll go ahead and fav this and cry a little
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:icontime-is-ours:
I know...











i know just what you mean...
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:iconseriousness:
congrats on the DD - i remember you from aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaages ago! great to see you're still around and still doing what you do best. =D
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