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i held the knife

they say that dead girls tell no tales
     silent spirits drifting heavenward
         lips bound with twine
     pursed and immovable

they say that dead girls tell no tales



     but they lie
for i saw you stand
bodyless
     and scream for justice
fists extended
accusing fingers
     indicating my soul
     buried beneath a heart of shale
flaking away
     remorse so long in coming

the tears that burn on empty cheeks
like the blood that ran so clear from your veins
     as you wept in silence
         while the words cut through your soul
splitting you in two
     sectioned and dissected
     soundless
         broken

and now your eyes burn into me
     fiery and motionless
silence your weapon of choice
sharp as the blade that severed the ties that bound us

     souls drifting disconnected

disembodied adoration
     a prayer for just one more chance
     rising in a dream
from the ashes of what once was
but there is no turning back




they say that dead girls tell no tales
     but they lied
         they lied



                     (i lied)






december 9, 2002
2:53 am
©2002-2009 `spunj13
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Author's Comments

this is a kind of cross between a dark piece and an emotional piece... i'm not sure if it even makes sense ...based on the time of day that i wrote it (about 5 minutes ago)... and i'm not even sure where it came from... but here it is anyways

//spunj13

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:iconmilath:
nothing like the grisly death of a relationship to inspire this sort of imagery. then again, maybe the first brushstrokes of repentance for someone you have wronged. interesting choices throughout, but the end, simply 'i lied' seems perfect..

nice work.

:icon82deg:
The imagery painted with your words are jaw-dropping...very grisly indeed...

I hope it wasn't based on a true story that happened somewhat 5 minutes before you wrote this piece ;) (Wink)

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:confused:confused?
Isn't it about time you seek him for the truth? I have.
:iconbreid:
Yow. Very emotional, definitely. It's a well drawn picture of rage. Great work, man.

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:iconchesterfield:
i do believe this is one of your best
+fav

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and to lose is to die
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:iconcj:
very kewl, has alot of emotion in it..i like it =p (Razz) ... good work. =) (Smile)

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:iconwaiting4chaos:
Hey man nice work.. Good to see your still around i wasnt sure if you were still writting or not.. I know you have been thinking alot...

Again man.. Beautiful work

-Chris

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Raise your Fist.
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:iconelphabastevens:
Extraordinary. Profoundly well done. And I must commend you for your deft and very precise choices in imagery. So many people just grab for any geological substance when they want to "pick a rock", but the choice of shale was exquisite. The sound, as well as the meaning, fit perfectly here. OM!

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:iconcreator07:
+fav this was wrote with great skill methinks. Its amazing waht a mind can do when tired. I loved the beging, only part I don't like is "silence your weapon of choice" jsut sounds unoriginal. And you sued teh word "disconnected" very well. I don't knw why, but I'm really amazed how well you used disconnected without it seemingly related to technology.

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