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here we are again

here we are again
standing at the crossroads
       of reality and fiction
backpacks full of youth
       and our vision clouded by rose-coloured lenses
only willing to see the world
       as we wish to see it

blinded by our inacceptance
we fall into despair
       for life itself
is less than fair

here we are again
standing at this juncture
       of meaning and desire
suitcases in hand
       and our sight clouded by a life lesslived
for we have seen the world
       and do not want any part of it

blinded by our own misjudgement
we fall into despair
       for life itself
is less than fair

here we are again
standing at the pinnacle
       of life and forever
our cares in hand
       and our vision cleared with reality
seeing the world at our last moments
       as we wish to see it










may 9, 2002
11:43 pm
this is sort of a progressive poem...moving from one time frame to the next, with different ages... it's just kind of an experiment...

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syncretism Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2002
love the repetition...the flow of the lines as the image keeps repeating...
...and yet is slightly different...
changed and yet not...
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jsenn Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2002
You know how many times your perception of the pinnacle of life will change, adjust, shift and clear with reality? Many. You caught its moments, its many, "meaning and desire." When we are young we never expect this will be gratifying, for we KNEW what it was to be...in the end, even the smallest "pinnacle" will be a mountain top simply because it is.

I love your poem!
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summerdies Featured By Owner May 29, 2002   Writer
Strong form. The images and metaphors are very compelling and well worded. The progression is done well enough that I can easily imagine the time of life depicted in each. The second verse after the chorus hit me like a ton of bricks, it is right where I am now.

(fav.)
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Dreaming as the summer dies
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geobyte Featured By Owner May 21, 2002  Hobbyist Writer
This was very wonderful...I hope you can tell how much I enjoyed it by my lack of words, hee.

This one really reminds me of myself, and how I look at things...
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raistlin Featured By Owner May 20, 2002
Ahh,the burden of experience over the years....beautifully written
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My breath gives birth to storms,
my blood is the essence of the night

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namaste Featured By Owner May 16, 2002
i like this experiment. the eyes of any age can be clouded by what has been and is. and yes, perhaps at the end we finally understand it all with eyes free of rose color or scale.
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elgatodiablo Featured By Owner May 16, 2002
i love the style of this one. and that you spelled it 'colour'. i want to be able to offer words to benefit you, but you have nothing here that i can suggest make-up for. so...you need to work on lowering your quality.
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someone once told me i had the uncanny ability to bring out the best in people. i told her to fuck off. i dont need that kind of pressure.
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utro Featured By Owner May 15, 2002
I love this! Excellent form. Wonderful evolving metaphor. really beautiful poem.
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Alison Weis, Assassin Photographer
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meow Featured By Owner May 15, 2002
I love this kinda stuff... taking in the whole sweep of life. Puts things in perspective, at least for me. Seems like I often get stuck in my crazy life, and if I'd just take a big step back, I can again see the beauty in the pain. Actually, this happened to me at the airport the other day. It was really weird. I just had the urge to just give everyone I saw a hug, but yet at the same time I was feeling so sad... I don't know. Anyway, I'm done now. Nice poem.

~mEoW~
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cooper Featured By Owner May 15, 2002
Epiphanies.... Revelations... they happen at certain times in life and its funny... :O (Eek) You wrote some thoughts of mine so wonderful, take care :O (Eek)
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masterfire Featured By Owner May 15, 2002
man, this is so ture...
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klf Featured By Owner May 15, 2002
this is written wonderfully I especially like the line
"backpacks full of youth
and our vision clouded by rose-coloured lenses"
very moving.
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sigur Featured By Owner May 15, 2002
wow, i really like this one, all your words speak very deeply
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Free thinkers are dangerous.
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82deg Featured By Owner May 15, 2002
Another stunning piece...love the progression it carries through...
I esp. loved this bit:
we fall into despair
for life itself
is less than fair
:) (Smile)
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.: Life should be enjoyed, not endured :. :) (Smile)
~ 82
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seriousness Featured By Owner May 15, 2002
excellent. experiment shmeriment. i never give your poems the reading they deserve. i should, but i know i won't. this saddens me.
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history is written by the winner.
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verbalize Featured By Owner May 14, 2002  Hobbyist Writer
o0o by the way I LOVE this picture !
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verbalize Featured By Owner May 14, 2002  Hobbyist Writer
I write poetry and I still never know what to comment ...just I really like it . :) (Smile)
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fangedfem Featured By Owner May 14, 2002
I wish I were better at commenting on poetry~ I really only know when I like something and it speaks to me as this one does =) (Smile) Excellent writing!
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If man were to be crossed with the cat, it would greatly improve man, but deteriorate the cat~

-Mark Twain
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milath Featured By Owner May 14, 2002
er.. pinnacle. yeah. i'm a writer. i swear. =P (Razz)
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milath Featured By Owner May 14, 2002
the repetition of the structure mirrors the repetition of the poem. i like the way 'growing up' is done in the poem.. from backpack to suitcase to hand implying there's less baggage at the end of life then there is in the middle, or at the beginning. because at the end we've finally accepted that life, as unfair as it might be, can be full of beauty and can be a blessing.

yeah... my interpretation anyway...

'standing at the pinnicle of life and forever'...love that.

milath
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breid Featured By Owner May 14, 2002  Professional Artist
Great words with a great moral.

So many find themselves in so much grief for expectactions of a life never promised them. So much in life situations depends on your point of view and your attitude toward the situation. Learning to survive them, accept them, thrive in them is maturity defined.

A wise statement.

I just added my 1st *FAV* from you!
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aesta Featured By Owner May 14, 2002
Great structure. (I'll have to get used to typing that for all your poems.) My favorite line is, "backpacks full of youth".
~aesta
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rebelchic Featured By Owner May 14, 2002
wow, i love the format of it...the words you used express the emotions clearly...beautiful as usual
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