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every rose fades

the night is empty
with no warmth beside
      me in this bed
the impression of your form
burned into these dirty sheets
      (my memory)

my dreams are numb
with no face smiling at
      me in the dark
the taste of your skin
bitter on these sallow lips
      (these memories)

           and with time
           every rose fades
                losing its shine

these halls are hollow
with no step echoing
      mine on the stairs
the sound of your feet
resound off these narrow walls
      (my memory)

the day is colourless
with no warm hand grazing
      mine in response
the feel of your fingers
clasped in these unworthy palms
      (these memories)

           for with time
           every rose fades
                losing its shine
           leaving me





                .alone.







december 17, 2002
5:15 pm
:iconspunj13:
here's the last one for today... i'm not sure exactly what brought this on.. maybe some of my life before this period of time...combined with my imagination... just some thoughts.. on relationships and love and all that....
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for those of you who got confused by my rose imagery? it's an idealized rose...one that shines because you have elevated it so much in your mind... it basically applies to a person...not even a rose
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//spunj13
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:iconnemish:
I agree with pwca, it has strong images. Great job here!
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:iconpwca:
:( (Sad)

some very potent imagery dear friend.
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:iconmilath:
sadness.

everything/one loses it's luster when you look at it long enough...

milath

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:iconloveistheanswer:
This is...wow. So much for mature constructive criticism, but oh well. This is, as everyone else has pretty much said, awesome. I love the form, the emotion and imagery your words provoke..wow, you are my new poetry role model, heh. This is just awesome. You have a gift, friend, don't let it go. Keep it up.
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~n0deal Dec 20, 2002  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And memories they dull with age as well... and we try pass it off as healing.
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~breid Dec 19, 2002  Professional Artist
Powerful. I like the dirty sheets comment.
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:icon82deg:
Beautiful...you constantly amaze me with your amazing works...i loved the imagery you created...and i loved the ending especially...how you had it into a unique layout as the piece flows...and the alone ending stark, and isolated at the bottom...
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:iconkrisalynn:
This is good, I like the rose imagery although I don't really think that I rose shines. ?
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:iconamusedtangerine:
indeed, it speaks to many. I've felt this too often, from one side and the other. It's also in wonderful form, each stanza complementing the others (as usual, spunj. :) (Smile) ) I've been doing a lot with roses lately, in paintings and in poetry (none posted, tho.) I like the image of a weeping, wilting dark rose...

Hug great job... +favlove
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:iconignite:
simple words, complex form, lovely job. i love the title. Heart

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