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evenflow
i strain against these bonds
(arms chained)
as your fingers rake across my flesh
lips whisp’ring
wet and lucid
upon my chest
sending silent fury to my limbs
i struggle against these bonds
desire feeding upon your taunts
and hungrily
you lick your lips
pausing
(for a moment)
before
inch by inch
you pull at the cloth
revealing your skin
s l o w l y
t o r t u r o u s l y
the fabric leaves your body
exposing stomach
and perfection
(your shapely arms that flow across my being)
uncovering well-formed thighs
beautiful and exposed
only a translucent piece of material between us
and with each second the hunger grows
to taste your skin
to feel your body against mine
then your fingers dance across my thighs
rising to my chest
to my face
(caressing my anxious existence)
and the craving rages hotter
struggling against these chains
you wrap your legs around my head
my hunger tearingatthecloththatseparatesus
tasting you
feeling you
needing you
as your fingers grip my neck
pulling me in
basking in your warmth
evenflow
(release)
september 26, 2002
2:56 pm








Devious Comments
This is marvelous! Love how it builds.....the excitment~ gawd! -I am so bad at commenting on poetry! Suffice to say that I REALLY enjoyed this
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good luck in the contest!
(did you mean for the line to say "silent fury to my limbs"?....just wanted to point that out)
I have always enjoyed the way you use line spacing in your poems to accentuate them, and build to a climactic point
yes, good luck in the contest...
damn you for doing this to me and damn you for writing it so well.
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Kit Lange
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You're good.
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good luck in the contest!!!
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Where there's moonlight I see your eyes
well, you finally got a comment from me, its been awhile, but our talking about it earlier made me realize how much I missed DA. I must say, this is pretty sweet, and I love how you say so much without using a lot of words. I maintain that the trick to erotica is subtlty and strong emotion, and you have both here. And I don't think its really TMI (maybe if you were writing about something that had actually happend I'd be a little more weirded out). I can really sense the building passion... beautiful.
-Paladin
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