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erotica challenge - spunj13 by `spunj13:iconspunj13:





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evenflow

i strain against these bonds
      (arms chained)
as your fingers rake across my flesh
lips whisp’ring
      wet and lucid
upon my chest
sending silent fury to my limbs
i struggle against these bonds
desire feeding upon your taunts

and hungrily
      you lick your lips
      pausing
           (for a moment)
before
      inch by inch
you pull at the cloth
      revealing your skin

s l o w l y
t o r t u r o u s l y

the fabric leaves your body
      exposing stomach
           and perfection
      (your shapely arms that flow across my being)
      uncovering well-formed thighs
      beautiful and exposed
           only a translucent piece of material between us
and with each second the hunger grows

      to taste your skin
      to feel your body against mine

then your fingers dance across my thighs
      rising to my chest
      to my face
           (caressing my anxious existence)
and the craving rages hotter
      struggling against these chains

you wrap your legs around my head
      my hunger tearingatthecloththatseparatesus
tasting you
      feeling you
      needing you
as your fingers grip my neck
pulling me in
      basking in your warmth
evenflow

      (release)




september 26, 2002
2:56 pm
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hmm... i don't usually participate in the poetry contests, but i got the most interesting idea for this one. for those of you who know me... isn't this frightening? ha... or as they say ...tmi...

honestly though...this is all from my imagination... i have never been in this situation (maybe someday)...

//spunj13
Daily Deviation, 2002-10-05

Daily DeviationI'm not even to quote any of the lines from erotica challenge - spunj13 by spunj13. I don't want to spoil the story. *grins* Go. Now. It's worth it. (Selected by +euphoria) (Featured by °euphoria)

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%fangedfem:iconfangedfem: Sep 26, 2002, 12:41:26 PM
uh umm......**breath breath** =) (Smile)

This is marvelous! Love how it builds.....the excitment~ gawd! -I am so bad at commenting on poetry! Suffice to say that I REALLY enjoyed this =D (Big Grin)

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~hedda:iconhedda: Sep 26, 2002, 12:52:30 PM
niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice

good luck in the contest!
(did you mean for the line to say "silent fury to my limbs"?....just wanted to point that out)

I have always enjoyed the way you use line spacing in your poems to accentuate them, and build to a climactic point ;) (Wink)
`tmpst24myst:icontmpst24myst: Sep 26, 2002, 1:21:40 PM
*breathing....*

yes, good luck in the contest...

damn you for doing this to me and damn you for writing it so well.
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°euphoria:iconeuphoria: Sep 26, 2002, 1:38:21 PM
um....heh. Wow. That made me really, really horny. Good job. lol

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`cooper:iconcooper: Sep 26, 2002, 3:54:19 PM
yes nicely written, glad that ur writing got a comment from euphoria, I haven't seem to get her to comment on mine... but maybe thats cause I suck really bad, and my next poem is the last i will probably post on da... so anyways im venting.... nicely written good luck in the contest.. :O (Eek) take care
`rebelchic:iconrebelchic: Sep 26, 2002, 5:49:22 PM
*sigh*

You're good.

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`nemish:iconnemish: Sep 26, 2002, 8:38:14 PM
My favourite part of this poem was the form, it seems to trickle from a waterfall.

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~amusedtangerine:iconamusedtangerine: Sep 26, 2002, 9:29:32 PM
oh...my...god. +favlove this is the best erotic poem i think i've read...well, ever, i suppose. and it conveys so much emotion (like all of your poems, in fact).

good luck in the contest!!!

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~paladin2001:iconpaladin2001: Sep 26, 2002, 10:33:30 PM
whew... allrriigght

well, you finally got a comment from me, its been awhile, but our talking about it earlier made me realize how much I missed DA. I must say, this is pretty sweet, and I love how you say so much without using a lot of words. I maintain that the trick to erotica is subtlty and strong emotion, and you have both here. And I don't think its really TMI (maybe if you were writing about something that had actually happend I'd be a little more weirded out). I can really sense the building passion... beautiful.

-Paladin